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Letter of Explanation
To,
The Visa Officer
High Commission of Canada
Name: SAA Esther
Institute Name: Toronto School of Management
Course: Diploma in Business Management
Dear Sir/Madam
I had applied for a study permit on January 17, 2019 to study at Toronto School of Management in Canada and got the visa rejection on January 30, 2019. The study permit was rejected for the following reasons:
“You have not satisfied me that you would leave Canada at the end of your stay”. In reaching this decision, I considered several factors, including:
Ø purpose of visit
Since I’m addressing the reasons for my rejection, my letter may be longer than the recommended one page please bear with me.
My name is SAA Esther I’m from Cameroon, I have an ABE (Association of Business Executive) L5 Diploma in Business Management pathway Financial Management. This diploma contains just 8 modules which is limited and just the introduction to business.
Starting working for my dad as an internal control assistant at his company (LIGHT SARL which is offering services and developing products in many different branch of activities such as health promotion and healthcare services, agriculture, breeding and fish farming), I realised that I lack a lot of skill and knowledge to fully perform, to take and have more responsibilities. That is why I decided to learn some more and do a proper training. I am currently earning a salary of 300000XAF per month.
Here in Cameroon unfortunately institutions specialize in management courses do not properly train students, don’t give themenough tools and skills that will be needed at the work place. My Dad was a chief medical doctor in several districts in Cameroon, after he was appointed as a technical adviser at the Ministry of Public Health then to the Director of Promotion and Health) before taking his retirement and decided to become an entrepreneur and open his own company. He travelled all around the world to many countries but the one country that stood out to him was Canada. He was overwhelm by their kindness, the country’s multi-cultural nature and above all their educational system.
Purpose of visit
The reason for my visit is to acquire an apply knowledge of the functional components in Business Management. I’m in need for the best knowledge and skills to be at my best at work. I chose Toronto School of Management (TSoM) which offers Business management with Co-op. My tuition fee is $12500 CAD. I already paid 25% of the fee which is $3500. I also obtain a scholarship of $5500.
My program consist of 17 modules which includes Windows Fundamentals and MS Office, Bookkeeping, Computerized and Financial Acct with Simply Accounting, Business Environment, Managing Financial Resources, Organizations and Behaviour, Marketing Principles, Business Decision Making, Research Project, FinancialAccounting and Reporting, Personal and Professional Development, Working with and Leading People, Managing Business Activities to Achieve Results, ManagingCommunications, Operations Management in Business, Business Work Experience, Business Work Ethics, and with a WorkPlacement. This course covers almost all sectors of a business. The best part is that TSoM not only provides during in-class lessons business simulations which makes you better assimilate lessons and also after learning all these modules, they place us in various business establishments for an on-the-job training, integrating our classroom studies with supervised practical work experience directly related to what we studied and our career goals. This course targets exactly what I’m in need of. It is a more complete diploma that gets you set and ready to excel in any business organization instantly which what I need and aim for. Plus it will be in a short period of time because with all the objectives there is for the Company I don’t want to be out for long.
FUTURE PLANS AND PROSPECT
At completion of my studies in Toronto, when I will return home I strongly believe that I will be a key asset to LIGHT SARL for it expansion, financial development, control, develop its marketing sector, staff recruiting and training, I will also act as his project coordinator; Business Analyst; business Consultant and any role I can have with the skill and knowledge I will gain many more skills that I will gain (attach to this a letter of promising employment letter). I also to see which other sector we can invest into and how we can expand throughout African creating our family legacy which our children and country will benefit from it.
Since we have plans to export our agricultural product firstly in central Africa then all around Africa and world in the next years, the need for me to know more about international business is crucial and in Toronto School of Management they train you for that.
I have no plans in extending my stay in Canada with all plans there is for my dad’s company. In my family it is impossible for us to live away from each other and our parents. My sisters also studied in Europe and Russia and all we came back and established ourselves back home.
FINANCE
My study will be fully sponsored by my father (Dr. SAA). I have attached my birth certificate and my father Identity Card. to prove he is my father.
Also, to demonstrate his commitment, my father Dr. SAA, has signed a letter of sponsorship undertaking to cover all cost of my studies in Canada for the full duration.
In Canada, I will still be a student with parent’s support. Thus, 100% of the funds that will used to pay my tuition fees and my living expenses during my schooling will be provided by my sponsor.
The personal bank statement amounting to approximately $ %%%%% Canadian (Please see attached his Personal Bank Statement. Doc, and Account Statement Doc). He has also acquired properties for which certificates have been provided.
My father is an entrepreneur and runs his own company (Leadership Investment and Global Health Technology ‘‘LIGHT SARL’’). The activities of my father’s company allow him to earn enough to support me during my studies. I have attached to this letter the evidence of the finances of my sponsor (some documents of properties of my father. Doc, currents contracts for 3 years. Doc his business documents, Doc Banks statement of his company Doc, Balance Sheet. Doc).
Lastly, I again request you to please consider my application for a study permit, and feel free to email or call me for a personal interview if you have any other ambiguities regarding my application.
Thanking you
