Urgent GCMS note explanations help

[jweekend]

Here it comes. The first SOP I wrote and got rejection. Please check.

Don't waste your time writing sop for no reason. Quite frankly, it's badly written and too generic, and the visa officers won't be bothered to read them nor make their decision based on your sop.

Save up more money and apply for a MBA.

 

[mgrc420]

You definitely do not have enough money. Have you researched on what it actually costs to live and study on Canada? And besides, you having the need to borrow money shows you do not have the financial capacity to study in Canada.

Your SOP is also very generic and doesn't say much or convincing at all.

The visa officer don't really have the time to read everyone's sop. Your documents shows clearly that tyou are not a genuine student with intentions to study nor have the financial capacity to do so.

This time around I'm showing

Personal savings fund: $21,536.00
Joint acc (with my wife): $22,572.00
Father savings fund: $49,000.00
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Total accumulated more or less: $90,000
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Besides have my own apartment value: around $90,000
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[mgrc420]

Don't waste your time writing sop for no reason. Quite frankly, it's badly written and too generic, and the visa officers won't be bothered to read them nor make their decision based on your sop.

Save up more money and apply for a MBA.

I may need to work on SOP. But honestly speaking I don't want to study MBA. It's too generic for me. Either I will study this program I intend to or I will not apply any further for MBA because my intention is not the immigration.

I'm just not sure how to impress VO with a well written SOP.

 

[Shazd85]

You definitely do not have enough money. Have you researched on what it actually costs to live and study on Canada? And besides, you having the need to borrow money shows you do not have the financial capacity to study in Canada.

Your SOP is also very generic and doesn't say much or convincing at all.

The visa officer don't really have the time to read everyone's sop. Your documents shows clearly that tyou are not a genuine student with intentions to study nor have the financial capacity to do so.

I agree the amount of money he is showing is hardly covers the rent and food for 3 months.

 

[mgrc420]

I agree the amount of money he is showing is hardly covers the rent and food for 3 months.

Thanks but my present financial standings

This time around I'm showing (for 2nd attempt)

Personal savings fund: $21,536.00
Joint acc (with my wife): $22,572.00
Father savings fund: $49,000.00
=========================
Total accumulated more or less: $90,000
=========================
Besides have my own apartment value: around $90,000

 

[spiderfromars]

I may need to work on SOP. But honestly speaking I don't want to study MBA. It's too generic for me. Either I will study this program I intend to or I will not apply any further for MBA because my intention is not the immigration.

I'm just not sure how to impress VO with a well written SOP.

correcting the grammatical errors on your sop first would be a good place to start, good luck!

 

[Shazd85]

This time around I'm showing

Personal savings fund: $21,536.00
Joint acc (with my wife): $22,572.00
Father savings fund: $49,000.00
=========================
Total accumulated more or less: $90,000
=========================
Besides have my own apartment value: around $90,000
=======================================

The issue i see with this is the source of funds. Visa officer would be concerned where the money coming from. How did you get rich suddenly. Officer may think money was borrowed to show strong finances. So you need to explain all this.

 

[spiderfromars]

also, try being a little more concise and what the other members said, you really should consider an mba program.

 

[jweekend]

I may need to work on SOP. But honestly speaking I don't want to study MBA. It's too generic for me. Either I will study this program I intend to or I will not apply any further for MBA because my intention is not the immigration.

I'm just not sure how to impress VO with a well written SOP.

sop is not to impress anyone

It is not an essay competition. Visa officer cannot just take your word for it and issue you a study permit based on that. They look at your documents first. If that doesn't meet the requirements, you don't get approved for a study permit.

 

[jweekend]

This time around I'm showing

Personal savings fund: $21,536.00
Joint acc (with my wife): $22,572.00
Father savings fund: $49,000.00
=========================
Total accumulated more or less: $90,000
=========================
Besides have my own apartment value: around $90,000
=======================================

So why didn't you provide that on your application? Your notes say that the visa officer could not find and personal funds.

And again, you needing to borrow money from your father even in your 30s for study shows that you do not have the money nor the intentions to study. You need to look at it from the visa officers perspective. Why would they think that you want to spend so much money, on a certificate course, in an expensive country, in a poorly reputed institution?

 

[Shazd85]

So why didn't you provide that on your application? Your notes say that the visa officer could not find and personal funds.

And again, you needing to borrow money from your father even in your 30s for study shows that you do not have the money nor the intentions to study. You need to look at it from the visa officers perspective. Why would they think that you want to spend so much money, on a certificate course, in an expensive country, in a poorly reputed institution?

Poorly reputed lol i thought he said high ranked institution

 

[jweekend]

Poorly reputed lol i thought he said high ranked institution

York isn't high ranked. It's the laughing stock of the Canadian education system.

 

[Impatient Dankaroo]

York isn't high ranked. It's the laughing stock of the Canadian education system.

I wouldn't say it's as bad as you're making it out to be. It's considered top 20 in Canada. There are plenty worse. The problem is not his institution but rather his choice of program. If he was doing a Master's in Marketing or Digital Marketing then he would have a much higher chance

 

[Shazd85]

York isn't high ranked. It's the laughing stock of the Canadian education system.

I have seen another post where he mentioned that he is going to submit 2nd attempt today. I think he is rushing into things he isn't well prepared for.
But i wish him all the best.

 

[mgrc420]

Right but for somone from 3rd world country it maybe equivalent to Oxford.
On positive note i read his comment on another post where he mentioned that he is going to submit 2nd attempt today. I think he is rushing into it and i dont see any positive outcome. Sometimes its better to take time out and prepare the documents as per requirement.
But i wish him all the best.

Yeah I was rushing on it. After having feedback from you people I decided to take it slow. Go through everything and make amendments where necessary. Thanks.