IELTS - Writing - For Band 7 or Above.
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Today the internet and tv have created that chance for ordinary people to become famous. Is it a positive or negative development ??
These days there are numerous social medial platforms, online websites and television channels which are playing significant role in making people renown across the globe. In my opinion, I believe this phenomenon to be a negative one which will be discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs with relevant examples.
The first and foremost point is that, this promotes violence. This is because, it is commonly witnessed that majority of people post hate messages and videos which eventually helps them in getting attention. To illustrate, a survey which was conducted by Oxford University on developing nation India revealed that 85% people who attain success had posted videos which affected the social sentiments of people in the country which resulted in communal riots. If they had not posted such videos, there would have been social harmony among the residents.
Another point worth mentioning is that, this affects the economic prosperity of a nation. The reason being is, since majority of people quit their job once they become famous because social networking giants such as YouTube, Facebook and Instagram pay them huge amount of money for getting likes and comments on their videos. For example, an article which was published in 'Times of India', this year in the month of June revealed that 75% of people once they get fame and attention resign from their day to day job since they want to focus on this area only. On the contrary, if they had not been famous, they would have continued in their profession resulting in financial growth of the country.
To conclude, although digital media and television have made people renown personalities, however, I vehemently content that such process has resulted in problems such as monetary growth of a nation and aggressive behaviour among citizens.
Please evaluate my essay sir
Today the internet and tv have created that chance for ordinary people to become famous. Is it a positive or negative development ??
These days there are numerous social medial platforms, online websites and television channels which are playing significant role in making people renown across the globe. In my opinion, I believe this phenomenon to be a negative one which will be discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs with relevant examples.
The first and foremost point is that, this promotes violence. This is because, it is commonly witnessed that majority of people post hate messages and videos which eventually helps them in getting attention. To illustrate, a survey which was conducted by Oxford University on developing nation India revealed that 85% people who attain success had posted videos which affected the social sentiments of people in the country which resulted in communal riots. If they had not posted such videos, there would have been social harmony among the residents.
Another point worth mentioning is that, this affects the economic prosperity of a nation. The reason being is, since majority of people quit their job once they become famous because social networking giants such as YouTube, Facebook and Instagram pay them huge amount of money for getting likes and comments on their videos. For example, an article which was published in 'Times of India', this year in the month of June revealed that 75% of people once they get fame and attention resign from their day to day job since they want to focus on this area only. On the contrary, if they had not been famous, they would have continued in their profession resulting in financial growth of the country.
To conclude, although digital media and television have made people renown personalities, however, I vehemently content that such process has resulted in problems such as monetary growth of a nation and aggressive behaviour among citizens.
@cansha Please evaluate my essay. I am planning to appear in the exam at end of December.
Rich countries should not employ skilled labor from poor countries, as poor countries need the workers more. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
So you could have combined the message in line three and line two and that would have made it a little more clear.In recent days, There is no mention of the time period in the essay topic. Do not bring in new information for paraphrasing. Just paraphrase the given sentence. Even if you wanted to do so "In recent days" seems like it just happened.
developed countries are increasingly employing the overseas skilled workers from underdeveloped countries. Paraphrasing is incomplete as the statement says this should not be done. The statement does not make any claim on why it should not be done.
This might have led to shortage of man power for underdeveloped nation to carry on its development activities. Now this sounds like your opinion and not something given in the essay topic as I said above topic line is silent on why it should not be done. You could have moved this line to after the next line.
To a certainextendextent I agree that employment offered by wealthy nation should not affect the growth of the poor countries.
The problem is that you are treating this as a "discuss both sides" essay. But that is not the question here. This whole paragraph is unnecessary. Plus there are a few grammatical errors.Developed countries has have large industrial plants and information technology hubs as a concrete for its internal growth and business trading, which in turn produces considerable number of job opportunities. As it requires huge man power, such countries target and extend their employment to skilled professionals in the under developed countries. Skilled people from such poor countriesarein fact, sees see this as an opportunity to support their finance financial needscrisesand are ready to leave nation without second thoughts. To illustrate, employees who are working in Information Technology for United states are mostly immigrants. Thus, to have adequate human resources, empowered nation keeps pulling up workers from needy nations.
So this paragraph is better even though it has many issues. But good thing is it fulfills the task response. Also, the support statement and examples are good. Although, the paragraph could be better in terms of its opening two lines. But, this shows you know how to write a good paragraph in IELTS but you need to work a little bit more.On the other hand, This construct looks weird if opening of previous paragraph is not "On the one hand" and even so these two phrases have been killed to death and if you can avoid using these.
poor countries which has had development plans to fulfil the basic need needs of the citizens would be left behind with insufficient workers. Engineers, Doctors, Architects and who have graduates and fled to foreign nations would be no more beneficial for their native land. Very weird phrasing.
For example, medical personnel and other health specialists from South East Asian countries, prefers to settle in high ranked western countries due to high income and lavish life style. As a consequence of this, apparently such Asian countries could not manage to support affected people in emergency times such as natural calamities and disasters. I like the supporting statement and example.
The conclusion is way off . You don't need to tell what rich countries should be doing. You just need to restate your opinion and reiterate main points of your essay. Spend sometime in reading a few more essays to get a grasp on how the conclusions should look.In conclusion, rich countries should consider the development of destitute countries. There should be a global agreement to reduce excess employment offered to under developed nations with respect to public service sectors such as medicine, education and so on.
Please someone evaluate my essay
Today the internet and tv have created that chance for ordinary people to become famous. Is it a positive or negative development ??
Do not miss the keyword in paraphrasing. without that the topic loses its meaning.These days there are numerous social medial platforms, online websites and television channels which are playing significant role in making people renown renowned across the globe. You have missed a keyword in the paraphrasing. Read the topic again. The topic is talking about "ordinary" people. That is the key to this essay here.
In my opinion, I believe this phenomenon to be a negative one which will be discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs with relevant examples.That's irrelevant. Everyone knows that. Why not give a glimpse of the essay instead here?
Well I don't like the argument here but the paragraph is not that bad. But could have been much better if you avoided unnecessary phrases. Although, as I said in the introduction also, this paragraph also missed a very crucial detail ... you failed to mention these were ordinary people doing this stuff to get attention and trying to be famous. See if you established that fact, this could have been much better.The first and foremost point is that, this promotes violence. Okay bold view.
This is because, it is commonly witnessed that majority of people post hate messages and videos which eventually helps them in getting attention.
Now think why couldn't you just combined the above two sentences to write a good complex sentence and avoid some unnecessary phrases like "This is because"
To illustrate, a survey which was conducted by Oxford University on developing nation India revealed that 85% people who attain success had posted videos which affected the social sentiments of people in the country which resulted in communal riots. If they had not posted such videos, there would have been social harmony among the residents.
I don't even know what to say. This is an outlandish argument and explanation. I know IELTS says they are looking at just the English and not your arguments and facts. But honestly, this won't fly.Another point worth mentioning is that, this affects the economic prosperity of a nation. Please stop writing such phrases. Now we have economics.
The reason being is, since majority of people quit their job once they become famous because social networking giants such as YouTube, Facebook and Instagram pay them huge amount of money for getting likes and comments on their videos. For example, an article which was published in 'Times of India', this year in the month of June revealed that 75% of people once they get fame and attention resign from their day to day job since they want to focus on this area only. On the contrary, if they had not been famous, they would have continued in their profession resulting in financial growth of the country.
Aggressive behavior is fine, the other reason not so much,To conclude, although digital media and television have made people renown personalities, Repeating introduction line and still missing crucial detail
however, I vehemently content contend that such process has resulted in problems such as monetary growth of a nation and aggressive behaviour among citizens.
Also please google difference between content and contend. You need to do some more work on your essays.
Do not miss the keyword in paraphrasing. without that the topic loses its meaning.
Well I don't like the argument here but the paragraph is not that bad. But could have been much better if you avoided unnecessary phrases. Although, as I said in the introduction also, this paragraph also missed a very crucial detail ... you failed to mention these were ordinary people doing this stuff to get attention and trying to be famous. See if you established that fact, this could have been much better.
I don't even know what to say. This is an outlandish argument and explanation. I know IELTS says they are looking at just the English and not your arguments and facts. But honestly, this won't fly.
Aggressive behavior is fine, the other reason not so much,
Also please google difference between content and contend. You need to do some more work on your essays.[/QUOTEthanks for the review.
I used the word this is because to show some cohesive device , and the sentence just after it is using which which I think makes it a complex one .
If you have to give me band out of 9 can you please evaluate on that point
Thank you
@stingyscorpio I don't give bands generally as I've no experience as IELTS examiner. But in my experience it will be tough to get 7 if task response is dodgy. And your task response in this essay needs to be a wee bit better.
Ok thanks for replying . I appreciate your efforts in taking out time . Wl try to learn from my mistakes@stingyscorpio I don't give bands generally as I've no experience as IELTS examiner. But in my experience it will be tough to get 7 if task response is dodgy. And your task response in this essay needs to be a wee bit better.
Thank you
@canshaSo you could have combined the message in line three and line two and that would have made it a little more clear.
The problem is that you are treating this as a "discuss both sides" essay. But that is not the question here. This whole paragraph is unnecessary. Plus there are a few grammatical errors.
So this paragraph is better even though it has many issues. But good thing is it fulfills the task response. Also, the support statement and examples are good. Although, the paragraph could be better in terms of its opening two lines. But, this shows you know how to write a good paragraph in IELTS but you need to work a little bit more.
The conclusion is way off . You don't need to tell what rich countries should be doing. You just need to restate your opinion and reiterate main points of your essay. Spend sometime in reading a few more essays to get a grasp on how the conclusions should look.
Thanks for your analysis and corrections.
I have reworked the essay. please find the latest essay below, kindly evaluate and provide your feedback.
Rich countries should not employ skilled labor from poor countries, as poor countries need the workers more. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
It is said that developed countries should not recruit skillful workers from overseas poorer countries, since, such poor countries need them for its own progress. I, personally, disagree with this proposal, as the developed countries need the skilled labor more.
Developed nations has huge industrial plants and technology hubs which in turn need considerable number of employees to support. Nations with inadequate internal human resource, extends the job offers to the skilled workers in the destitute countries. Furthermore, this would be treated as good opportunity by the individual unemployed citizens from poor countries and with this they can manage their financial needs. For an instance, most of the unemployed graduates from South East Asia are immigrated to western countries as they find offers in job market.
Third-world countries can benefit by letting its citizen work in prosperous nations. Firstly, many professionally trained workers can improve the productivity of the host country and thus, the affluent countries would come forward to invest more fund for outsourcing in the poor countries. Such funds can be used to implement development plan and to fulfil its citizens basic needs in poor countries. In addition to this, a diplomatic relationship can be built between nations, where the poor nations can inherit the development ideas from developed nations. For instance, many skilful Indian are employed by Unites States. As a result of this, India is now in top priority when American conducts financial programs.
In conclusion, I believe that third-world countries should send their professional workers to some developed countries for some advantages in terms of living standard improvement and economic development.
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You recently lost your driving license, and someone sent it back to you. Write a letter to him/her.
I hope you are doing good. I am writing this letter to thank you for sending my lost license back to me yesterday.
I cannot say how happy I am by receiving my license, because without an actual license, I cannot even drive in the city. Since my job requires driving all day, I would have been in a trouble if you had not sent it to me on time. On top of it, this is also a piece of identity which could have been misused if it falls into wrong hands.
I wonder how you found it in the grocery shop? I remembered visiting the supermarket on Thursday, but I was not sure about dropping it in the store. This is because I called the customer care of this mall yesterday morning, but surprisingly, they were not able to find it.
Anyways, I cannot thank you enough for your incredible help, but at list, what I can do is to offer you a dinner in the prominent restaurant called “The Grand Bhagavat” whenever you get some free time. Also, I have attached a small present for you with this letter.
Once again, thank you so much, and I hope you would like the gift
Yours faithfully,
Pritesh
You recently lost your driving license, and someone sent it back to you. Write a letter to him/her.
- How important the license is to you?
- Asking how he/she found it
- Saying how you would love to thank him/her.
I hope you are doing good. I am writing this letter to thank you for sending my lost license back to me yesterday.
I cannot say how happy I am by receiving my license, because without an actual license, I cannot even drive in the city. Since my job requires driving all day, I would have been in a trouble if you had not sent it to me on time. On top of it, this is also a piece of identity which could have been misused if it falls into wrong hands.
I wonder how you found it in the grocery shop? I remembered visiting the supermarket on Thursday, but I was not sure about dropping it in the store. This is because I called the customer care of this mall yesterday morning, but surprisingly, they were not able to find it.
Anyways, I cannot thank you enough for your incredible help, but at list, what I can do is to offer you a dinner in the prominent restaurant called “The Grand Bhagavat” whenever you get some free time. Also, I have attached a small present for you with this letter.
Once again, thank you so much, and I hope you would like the gift
Yours faithfully,
Pritesh
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You did a one day course in a local college, but you were unhappy about it, write a letter to the principal of the college and in your letter write
-details about the course
-Why are you unhappy?
-Give some suggestions
Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction towards the one day course on the JAVA programming language which was held last week. The course was on advanced JAVA concepts which included various intermediate topics about the language.
Although, the course was advertised as the advanced JAVA concepts, but I felt it included more of the basic concepts. I had applied for the course to improve my skills for the upcoming exam, however, the outcome of the course was not fruitful.
As a suggestion, in the next batch of the course, the actual topics from the advanced JAVA concepts can be taught. Also, practical demonstration of the examples on the projector will not only help students to grasp the concepts, but also give them the practical exposure to the topic.
I hope all the above points are taken into consideration to give more value to the course.
Yours Sincerely,
John Kramer.
You did a one day course in a local college, but you were unhappy about it, write a letter to the principal of the college and in your letter write
-details about the course
-Why are you unhappy?
-Give some suggestions
Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction towards the one day course on the JAVA programming language which was held last week. The course was on advanced JAVA concepts which included various intermediate topics about the language.
Although, the course was advertised as the advanced JAVA concepts, but I felt it included more of the basic concepts. I had applied for the course to improve my skills for the upcoming exam, however, the outcome of the course was not fruitful.
As a suggestion, in the next batch of the course, the actual topics from the advanced JAVA concepts can be taught. Also, practical demonstration of the examples on the projector will not only help students to grasp the concepts, but also give them the practical exposure to the topic.
I hope all the above points are taken into consideration to give more value to the course.
Yours Sincerely,
John Kramer.
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Some people think that new technology always improves the lives of workers. Other people believe that it results in disadvantageous for workers. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many people have differing views about the impact of latest technology on the laborers. Some people believe that it has a positive effect on the life of the workers while there are others who believe that it has more drawbacks. In my opinion, I think it drastically improves the lives of the blue-collar workers as advanced machinery takes majority of the workload.
On one hand, there are some who think that use of the latest machines has more cons because of the learning curve associated with it. Undoubtedly, the workers have to be rigorously trained in order to enable them to use these advanced machinery. The use of latest JCB cement mixer, for instance, will require some prior training in order to operate it. However, once the training is successfully completed, it can immensely help the laborers.
On the other hand, there are others who believe that the latest machinery makes the work very easy for the workers. I agree with this view since the advanced machines take up the majority of the workload. To illustrate, the CAT brick making machine would continuously create bricks without the interaction of the worker once the instructions are fed into the machine. Not only this reduces the workload of the working staff but also gives them free time to focus on other activities.
In conclusion, after having a look at both the differing views, although the advanced machines requires some training in order to operate it, but I believe once they acquire the knowledge to operate it, it tremendously reduces the work of the blue-collar workers.
Some people think that new technology always improves the lives of workers. Other people believe that it results in disadvantageous for workers. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many people have differing views about the impact of latest technology on the laborers. Some people believe that it has a positive effect on the life of the workers while there are others who believe that it has more drawbacks. In my opinion, I think it drastically improves the lives of the blue-collar workers as advanced machinery takes majority of the workload.
On one hand, there are some who think that use of the latest machines has more cons because of the learning curve associated with it. Undoubtedly, the workers have to be rigorously trained in order to enable them to use these advanced machinery. The use of latest JCB cement mixer, for instance, will require some prior training in order to operate it. However, once the training is successfully completed, it can immensely help the laborers.
On the other hand, there are others who believe that the latest machinery makes the work very easy for the workers. I agree with this view since the advanced machines take up the majority of the workload. To illustrate, the CAT brick making machine would continuously create bricks without the interaction of the worker once the instructions are fed into the machine. Not only this reduces the workload of the working staff but also gives them free time to focus on other activities.
In conclusion, after having a look at both the differing views, although the advanced machines requires some training in order to operate it, but I believe once they acquire the knowledge to operate it, it tremendously reduces the work of the blue-collar workers.
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You are studying for a qualification, and you would like some time off work to complete it.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
· Ask for some time off to complete a qualification.
· Suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off.
· Say how the qualification helps your job or company.
Dear Sir,
I have started my MBA Executive one year ago from University on Lancaster and currently enrolled in 3rd semester. My classes are schedule twice a week (Monday & Tuesday) from 4:00pm to 6:00pm. I would request you to kindly allow relaxation of one hour to leave office early so that I can attend my classes.
As I am currently working as import associate and have certain duties and task to complete, I can assure you that, I will try my best to complete my obligation on time and would also allocate my spare time to finish my tasks.
MBA is a professional degree and once I have completed it will helps me to perform my duties with better understanding and confidence. This will also improve my abilities to think tactically and resolve issues with ease.
You are studying for a qualification, and you would like some time off work to complete it.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
· Ask for some time off to complete a qualification.
· Suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off.
· Say how the qualification helps your job or company.
Dear Sir,
I have started my MBA Executive one year ago from University on Lancaster and currently enrolled in 3rd semester. My classes are schedule twice a week (Monday & Tuesday) from 4:00pm to 6:00pm. I would request you to kindly allow relaxation of one hour to leave office early so that I can attend my classes.
As I am currently working as import associate and have certain duties and task to complete, I can assure you that, I will try my best to complete my obligation on time and would also allocate my spare time to finish my tasks.
MBA is a professional degree and once I have completed it will helps me to perform my duties with better understanding and confidence. This will also improve my abilities to think tactically and resolve issues with ease.
@ Cansha please evaluate.
Some people think that the media (newspaper) have the right to publish details of people's private life, while other's think it should be controlled?
Discuss both views.
It is argued that mass media has the authority to print storied about personal lives of people, however, few opine that such content should be scrutinized.This essay will first discuss that exposing private lives of people influences others to bring a positive change in their life.It will also demonstrate that putting private life of an individual on social platform is completely unethical.
At the outset, it is opiniated that sharing somebody's personal experience with public will have a positive effect on general masses.This is to say that if life experiences of an eminent personality are broadcasted through newspapers, ordinary people will gain knowledge through it and apply it in their own lives. For instance, whenever journalists print news about any charities that are done by celebrities, people follow them and donate towards social causes.
Alternatively, it is believed to be an unethical practice to intervene in anyone's private life. In other words, people do not want to share what they do in their personal lives with everyone. Each and every individual wants to maintain privacy of certain aspects of their lives and nobody has the right to disclose it to public. To illustrate, I would not want anyone to know which accommodation I chose to stay in during my last holiday.
In conclusion, it is acceptable that media discloses private happenings in people's lives considering the fact that others will get motivated by it.
Nonetheless, exposing someones family life is absolutely despicable as no one should intrude anyone's personal space.
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Some people think that the media (newspaper) have the right to publish details of people's private life, while other's think it should be controlled?
Discuss both views.
It is argued that mass media has the authority to print storied about personal lives of people, however, few opine that such content should be scrutinized.This essay will first discuss that exposing private lives of people influences others to bring a positive change in their life.It will also demonstrate that putting private life of an individual on social platform is completely unethical.
At the outset, it is opiniated that sharing somebody's personal experience with public will have a positive effect on general masses.This is to say that if life experiences of an eminent personality are broadcasted through newspapers, ordinary people will gain knowledge through it and apply it in their own lives. For instance, whenever journalists print news about any charities that are done by celebrities, people follow them and donate towards social causes.
Alternatively, it is believed to be an unethical practice to intervene in anyone's private life. In other words, people do not want to share what they do in their personal lives with everyone. Each and every individual wants to maintain privacy of certain aspects of their lives and nobody has the right to disclose it to public. To illustrate, I would not want anyone to know which accommodation I chose to stay in during my last holiday.
In conclusion, it is acceptable that media discloses private happenings in people's lives considering the fact that others will get motivated by it.
Nonetheless, exposing someones family life is absolutely despicable as no one should intrude anyone's personal space.
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Someone please evaluate : PS - I rewrote this essay and tried to improve my vocabulary.
People use internet more instead of reading news paper and watching television. Do you agree or disagree.
It is argued that people prefer to consult internet over television and print media as it incorporates features of both. This essay completely agrees with the above statement because firstly, internet provides a platform which can be utilized to fetch information about several subjects and secondly, an individual can look for specific information that interests him.
At the outset, high speed internet is home to wide range of facts and figures that covers numerous topics. In other words, if a person wants to look for any type of information, he can refer computers and internet as it acts as a repository for huge range of subjects. For instance, Wikipedia acts as a magnificent source of database, in case someone wants to access information about any particular issue.
In Addition, a person can explore websites in accordance to his personal interests. This is to say that televisions and newspapers seldom broadcast news which interests everyone and as few people prefer to watch news based on the problems which they find interesting , internet acts as the perfect solution. To illustrate, as per a research conducted by students at the Harvard University, it was found that 90% of the students referred news websites to follow latest updates about their favourite celebrities.
In conclusion, it is evident that internet has overshadowed newspapers and television sets as it enables them to acquire knowledge on almost any topic in the world. Moreover, high speed internet entitles people to look for news they are actually interested in .
People use internet more instead of reading news paper and watching television. Do you agree or disagree.
It is argued that people prefer to consult internet over television and print media as it incorporates features of both. This essay completely agrees with the above statement because firstly, internet provides a platform which can be utilized to fetch information about several subjects and secondly, an individual can look for specific information that interests him.
At the outset, high speed internet is home to wide range of facts and figures that covers numerous topics. In other words, if a person wants to look for any type of information, he can refer computers and internet as it acts as a repository for huge range of subjects. For instance, Wikipedia acts as a magnificent source of database, in case someone wants to access information about any particular issue.
In Addition, a person can explore websites in accordance to his personal interests. This is to say that televisions and newspapers seldom broadcast news which interests everyone and as few people prefer to watch news based on the problems which they find interesting , internet acts as the perfect solution. To illustrate, as per a research conducted by students at the Harvard University, it was found that 90% of the students referred news websites to follow latest updates about their favourite celebrities.
In conclusion, it is evident that internet has overshadowed newspapers and television sets as it enables them to acquire knowledge on almost any topic in the world. Moreover, high speed internet entitles people to look for news they are actually interested in .
Hi @cansha,
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There are some problems with the changing rooms in a sports center that you visit. Several complaints have been registered, but there is no success.
Write a letter to the sports manager.
· What the problem is
· How you feel about the problem
· What steps you want the manager to take
Dear sir or madam,
I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction regarding the changing rooms in your North York branch of the sports centers.
The foremost problem is that from last 2 months, the maintenance work of these rooms has not been taken place and, as a result, there are garbage and unwanted trash everywhere. On top of it, even by contacting your customer care department and complaining about these issues, I have not received any required support or any forms of communication from them.
Despite being a premium member of our sports center for the last 5 years, I feel devastated and disheartened as you do not value your customers' requirements and comfort. From this accident, I can only think that you seem profit-driven and only care about earning enormous money, instead of spending some of them on your property's maintenance.
However, I would like you to keep track of your maintenance staff and allocate them proper time-slots every day in order to mitigate this problem. In addition to this, I think you ought to provide your proper attention in training your customer support team in order to satisfy your club members' problems.
I am waiting for your prompt steps regarding this matter.
Yours faithfully,
Pritesh Gondaliya
Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers. Others think that it is depended on the attitude of the students. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Although skillful educators are believed to be responsible for one's academic success, there are some who consider that students' determination toward their studies often plays a predominant role in their success. In my opinion, without a positive attitude, pupils cannot succeed in their education even if they have knowledgeable teachers in their institutes.
Some argue that students' educational skills and abilities can be improved by faculties who possess contemporary methods of teaching. This is because they tend to be expertise in their fields and have adequate knowledge of teaching with diverse styles. For instance, in primary schools, teachers often provide their pupils with various simpler math strategies to perform mathematic operations, namely addition, arithmetic, or multiplication, effortlessly. In addition to this, conducive learning environment through laboratory training and informative seminars is also offered to individuals by their instructors in order to help them acquire academic contents of various subjects more easily.
Nevertheless, I think that students' willingness to study anything is more important, because without learning attitude in them, a good educator cannot even aid them to succeed in their education. If pupils do not provide their enough concentration in their classes or practical assignments, they would not be able to achieve their academic goals. Therefore, a positive attitude and persistence toward studies is must for any person in order to master any courses. This can be exemplified by some village students, who are unbelievably successful in their schools and university, despite not having expert instructors in their rural regions. This clearly shows how significant is the effect of one's attitude on their studies.
To summarize, while it is often thought that a skilled faculty has a profound effect not only on students but also on their educational success, I believe determination to succeed in their education with or without an informative teacher is crucial for any person.
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There are some problems with the changing rooms in a sports center that you visit. Several complaints have been registered, but there is no success.
Write a letter to the sports manager.
· What the problem is
· How you feel about the problem
· What steps you want the manager to take
Dear sir or madam,
I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction regarding the changing rooms in your North York branch of the sports centers.
The foremost problem is that from last 2 months, the maintenance work of these rooms has not been taken place and, as a result, there are garbage and unwanted trash everywhere. On top of it, even by contacting your customer care department and complaining about these issues, I have not received any required support or any forms of communication from them.
Despite being a premium member of our sports center for the last 5 years, I feel devastated and disheartened as you do not value your customers' requirements and comfort. From this accident, I can only think that you seem profit-driven and only care about earning enormous money, instead of spending some of them on your property's maintenance.
However, I would like you to keep track of your maintenance staff and allocate them proper time-slots every day in order to mitigate this problem. In addition to this, I think you ought to provide your proper attention in training your customer support team in order to satisfy your club members' problems.
I am waiting for your prompt steps regarding this matter.
Yours faithfully,
Pritesh Gondaliya
Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers. Others think that it is depended on the attitude of the students. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Although skillful educators are believed to be responsible for one's academic success, there are some who consider that students' determination toward their studies often plays a predominant role in their success. In my opinion, without a positive attitude, pupils cannot succeed in their education even if they have knowledgeable teachers in their institutes.
Some argue that students' educational skills and abilities can be improved by faculties who possess contemporary methods of teaching. This is because they tend to be expertise in their fields and have adequate knowledge of teaching with diverse styles. For instance, in primary schools, teachers often provide their pupils with various simpler math strategies to perform mathematic operations, namely addition, arithmetic, or multiplication, effortlessly. In addition to this, conducive learning environment through laboratory training and informative seminars is also offered to individuals by their instructors in order to help them acquire academic contents of various subjects more easily.
Nevertheless, I think that students' willingness to study anything is more important, because without learning attitude in them, a good educator cannot even aid them to succeed in their education. If pupils do not provide their enough concentration in their classes or practical assignments, they would not be able to achieve their academic goals. Therefore, a positive attitude and persistence toward studies is must for any person in order to master any courses. This can be exemplified by some village students, who are unbelievably successful in their schools and university, despite not having expert instructors in their rural regions. This clearly shows how significant is the effect of one's attitude on their studies.
To summarize, while it is often thought that a skilled faculty has a profound effect not only on students but also on their educational success, I believe determination to succeed in their education with or without an informative teacher is crucial for any person.