I'm not going to get in to grammar and sentence structure for this review. The good thing about this essay is that mostly it is on point and answers the questions asked. So you are getting close of Task Response. However, my feedback is on task response itself. You could have made task response a little bit better.
It is considered by some that having tons of money is the most effective way to gain happiness in life, however, some have contradicting views about this statement. In my opinion, money is a good tool to use in accessing other reinforcing items or activities that society offers, but it is not the sole reason to make a person happy. For some, they feel happiest when they are able to be with people and provide assistance. I understand what you wanted to say here but this sentence could be written in better way and you need to make this "provide assistance" a little bit more clear. May be say community service or something like that
To start with, having a large fund increases the opportunities of people to reward themselves and engage in luxurious life. Financially equipped individuals are more capable of purchasing a variety of branded items, or dine in fancy restaurants without worrying about the cost. Access to different leisure activities also plays a major part too. Oftentimes, since it is expensive, it is impossible for financially inadequate people to attain, but for rich people it is not the case. The flexibility of making decisions of what to do in life without boundaries or limitations make others feel content and worry-less. Having the ability to do what you like keeps you motivated and therefore leads to happier perspective in life. With this notion, people agree that happiness depends on money.
This BP is good enough to show your point that money let's people buy the good things in life.
On another note, there are other means to feel happy, aside from earning money and be rich. Sharing time and effort are the main key stimuli that people considered to feel brighter. A good example to share is when friends and families meet to bond. Most prefer engaging in social activities with others such as going on a picnic or watching movies or simply engage in private conversation with them. Moreover, some find it fulfilling too when they are able to extend help with their loved ones or to other members of the community. Volunteering is the common norm nowadays that people engage with to make their life meaningful and happier. You just needed to explore this idea in a bit more detail than just writing one sentence to explain how volunteering may be a better avenue for some people to seek happiness.
In conclusion, it is argued by others that having a lot of money is enough to make one happier since it helps in gaining tangible items or indefinite access to expensive leisures in life, but there are other ways in attaining happiness. For example, spending quality time with immediate family and friends, and making yourself a beacon to make others feel better. Good conclusion line if you explored this idea in a bit more detail in BP2.