The_Prince said:
Really !
my original one is even much brief than that, I really don't know what else to include. In that way I have nothing to add more than extra technical details that probably the officer is not gonna understand !
From my experience GOOD letter should be more direct, especific. Not necessarily talk about how good student you are, what exciting project you are working on, what are the achievements are.... What you need, you need to covey exact information and key words what they are looking for.
For example
To whom it may be concern:
Letter of reference for XXXXXXXXX
I am writing this leter in support of XXXXXX's aplication for permanent residency in Canada. (Should be a bit details about your program name, department and when you joint.)
As a PhD student he is emplyed as
FULL time Research Assistant and Teaching Assistant. He spends
XXX hours/week for TA and
XX hours/week for RA for a total of
XXX hours/week. (You can talk about total number of hours, duration of your job and how long you have been employed, I mean your end of contact.)
Mr. XXXXX works under my supervison, His main duties and responsibilities as a RA are as follows
1.Design and conduct experiment
2.XXXXXXXXX
3.XXXXXXXXX
4.Perform literature review
5.XXXXXXXXX
6.Wite journal paper to communicate.......
7. Supervise undergraduate summer research students (additional, not in the list though)
His Main responsibilities as TA are as follows
1.Assist in the preparations of class lecture materials
2.XXXXXXXXXXXX
3. Grade assignments and examinations
4.XXXXXX
His annual salary is XXXXX CAD per year. He also receives XXXXXXXXXX, (you can talk about other benifits and at last total amount of salary).
Please do not hesitate to contact me via email atXXX@XXX.ca or telephone at XXXXX.
Sincerely
As I did, the important information should be in bold, then no way to miss those and responsibilities to point wise, easy to find out.
I hope it will help others. GOOD LUCK