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ambyg

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Feb 20, 2019
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Tungbaskee said:
Thanks for enlightening me earlier, after checking properly, I kind of agree with you, most of the times the examiners do not have time to read all your essay, so it is safe to stick to the keywords of the essay.

Please take a look at my new approach towards the essay question, and share your opinion. I am aware you are not an ielts teacher, just need to hear from you. Thank you, see new approach below:

Cooking is an integral part of processing raw food to make it edible. While some believe that the whole process is a sheer waste of time and energy, they are also of the opinion that it is easier and faster to purchase food from outdoor restaurants and fast foods. This essay will discuss why I agree that cooking is a waste of time and further discuss why it is better to purchase food from eateries.

To embark on, cooking consists of various methods such as mixing ingredients, baking and frying e.t.c. Without proper cooking skills, one would only be wasting precious time on trying to fix a meal, which may turn out to be tasteless and eventually not solve hunger problems. A recent study by the food and nutrition department of University of Lagos shows that 75% of unskilled people who have tried out cooking, agrees that they would rather have preferred to spend their time on other activities than to cook.

Furthermore, the modern day lifestyle does not really give room to tasks such as cooking, when in most cases it is really faster and cheaper to visit outdoor restaurants to get food. With the numerous pressure people get from work, it is only proper to resent to easier ways to get food, other than expend quality time to deal with work to cooking. As an example, very productive people at work rarely spare out time to cook, knowing they can get ready made food quicker and less expensive, thereby fully focusing all their energy and time on proffering solutions to the task at hand.

In conclusion, cooking is basically a waste of quality time, when people can conveniently acquire food from restaurants, which is way cheaper than cooking and very suitable for modern lifestyle.
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What kind of essay is it? Advantages Disadvantages or agree disagree?
 
Nakulkapur

Nakulkapur

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Feb 4, 2019
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Tungbaskee said:
Thanks for enlightening me earlier, after checking properly, I kind of agree with you, most of the times the examiners do not have time to read all your essay, so it is safe to stick to the keywords of the essay.

Please take a look at my new approach towards the essay question, and share your opinion. I am aware you are not an ielts teacher, just need to hear from you. Thank you, see new approach below:

Cooking is an integral part of processing raw food to make it edible. While some believe that the whole process is a sheer waste of time and energy, they are also of the opinion that it is easier and faster to purchase food from outdoor restaurants and fast foods. This essay will discuss why I agree that cooking is a waste of time and further discuss why it is better to purchase food from eateries.

To embark on, cooking consists of various methods such as mixing ingredients, baking and frying e.t.c. Without proper cooking skills, one would only be wasting precious time on trying to fix a meal, which may turn out to be tasteless and eventually not solve hunger problems. A recent study by the food and nutrition department of University of Lagos shows that 75% of unskilled people who have tried out cooking, agrees that they would rather have preferred to spend their time on other activities than to cook.

Furthermore, the modern day lifestyle does not really give room to tasks such as cooking, when in most cases it is really faster and cheaper to visit outdoor restaurants to get food. With the numerous pressure people get from work, it is only proper to resent to easier ways to get food, other than expend quality time to deal with work to cooking. As an example, very productive people at work rarely spare out time to cook, knowing they can get ready made food quicker and less expensive, thereby fully focusing all their energy and time on proffering solutions to the task at hand.

In conclusion, cooking is basically a waste of quality time, when people can conveniently acquire food from restaurants, which is way cheaper than cooking and very suitable for modern lifestyle.
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I guess now you are sticking to the topic and not going off the topic. However, now you seem to be repeating some words like using why twice in same line of introduction. Also, I guess grammer can be improved a bit. Rest I believe it is fine
 
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Tungbaskee

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Feb 7, 2019
45
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ambyg said:
What kind of essay is it? Advantages Disadvantages or agree disagree?
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Question: cooking is considered a waste of time and it is a lot convenient and makes modern life easy to buy food from restaurants.

Do you agree with this and share your opinion?
 
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Tungbaskee

Full Member
Feb 7, 2019
45
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Nakulkapur said:
I guess now you are sticking to the topic and not going off the topic. However, now you seem to be repeating some words like using why twice in same line of introduction. Also, I guess grammer can be improved a bit. Rest I believe it is fine
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Thanks. Is it worthy of a 7 in your opinion
 
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Mumbai2Canada

Star Member
Feb 19, 2019
124
141
Santy1982 said:
Go ahead an apply... but don't get your hopes up though.... The way i would look at this is that looking back, you shouldn't have any regrets...
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Thanks. I know there is probably a minimal chance of success with this. My wife would be giving her exam this Saturday and I plan on giving mine for a remark if she doesn't do well.
 
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Mumbai2Canada

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Feb 19, 2019
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Tungbaskee said:
Thanks for enlightening me earlier, after checking properly, I kind of agree with you, most of the times the examiners do not have time to read all your essay, so it is safe to stick to the keywords of the essay.

Please take a look at my new approach towards the essay question, and share your opinion. I am aware you are not an ielts teacher, just need to hear from you. Thank you, see new approach below:

Cooking is an integral part of processing raw food to make it edible. While some believe that the whole process is a sheer waste of time and energy, they are also of the opinion that it is easier and faster to purchase food from outdoor restaurants and fast foods. This essay will discuss why I agree that cooking is a waste of time and further discuss why it is better to purchase food from eateries.

To embark on, cooking consists of various methods such as mixing ingredients, baking and frying e.t.c. Without proper cooking skills, one would only be wasting precious time on trying to fix a meal, which may turn out to be tasteless and eventually not solve hunger problems. A recent study by the food and nutrition department of University of Lagos shows that 75% of unskilled people who have tried out cooking, agrees that they would rather have preferred to spend their time on other activities than to cook.

Furthermore, the modern day lifestyle does not really give room to tasks such as cooking, when in most cases it is really faster and cheaper to visit outdoor restaurants to get food. With the numerous pressure people get from work, it is only proper to resent to easier ways to get food, other than expend quality time to deal with work to cooking. As an example, very productive people at work rarely spare out time to cook, knowing they can get ready made food quicker and less expensive, thereby fully focusing all their energy and time on proffering solutions to the task at hand.

In conclusion, cooking is basically a waste of quality time, when people can conveniently acquire food from restaurants, which is way cheaper than cooking and very suitable for modern lifestyle.
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Just my 2 cents on your essay. "Etc" is generally not recommended for essays since it makes the tone being used seem informal. Also, there are a few grammatical errors in your sentences as well as some punctuation issues. The overall structure you are using for the essay is good though.
 
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Adhi_Krishnan

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Dec 28, 2018
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hitc said:
I need advice from all experience people here. I score L9 R8.5 W6.5 S8.5.. Need .5 more in writing, but read somewhere that, one shall not apply for re-checking, if there is a difference of more than 2 bands in other sections. Kindly advice, if i shall go for the same or not ?
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I quite didn't understand this, should you not apply for EOR if there is 2 or more band difference in other sections ? any reason why ?
 
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nehageorge13

Member
Jan 20, 2019
16
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Got my eor result today no change in scores
L8
S7
W6.5
R7
will give ilets test again.
can anyone recommend now i should opt for idp or bc as earlier it was idp?
 
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Chicjennie

Full Member
Feb 28, 2019
28
10
Tungbaskee said:
I think I need to share this and have some good writers score me:

Question: cooking is considered a waste of time and it is a lot convenient and makes modern life easy to buy food from restaurants.

Do you agree with this and share your opinion?

My answer:

Cooking is an integral part of processing raw food to make it edible. While some believe that the whole process is a sheer waste of time and energy, they are also of the opinion that it is easier and faster to purchase food from outdoor restaurants and fast foods. In my opinion, I believe it's more important to be wary of the hygiene and the cost implications of having to buy ready made food regularly.


To embark on, cooking consists of various methods such as mixing ingredients, baking, frying, boiling e.t.c that can be daunting and time consuming. Nonetheless, people need to take out time to prepare their own meals, so as to avoid consuming unhygienic meals. Most fast foods use a lot of unhealthy ingredients to mass produce food, which may result in people becoming obese and eventually cause heart disease. A recent study have shown that people who eat out a lot are more prone to get heart related diseases, as against those that take out time to prepare their meals.


However, the modern day world really does not give one time to cook, as there are lots of task to be accomplished. Hence, people tend to just acquire ready made meals or visit restaurants to quench their hunger. The cost implication of always buying food can be overwhelming after one take out time to do an overall schedule of how much is spent on food. An excerpt from the book "cook and save" suggests that people on the same wage bill who take out time to prepare their own meal are a lot richer than those who opt otherwise.


In conclusion, although it is sometimes Herculean and time consuming to cook, it is way healthier and financially wise to indulge in it, regardless of today's modern lifestyle.

If the above gives me 6.5 then I really don't know what to do again
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While I think your essay was good enough, I noticed a few lapses.
First, your paragraphing was quite too lengthy. Shorter paragraphs would have helped.

Second,Your opinion should come at the last paragraph and not in the first.

Third, your statements should be informal. Words like "it's" should not or sparingly be used. "It is" is more appropriate.

Four, in the second paragraph, the statement "To embark on, cooking" is wrong. You would have just stated that cooking can be done in a variety of ways...

Five, in the third paragraph, the statement "after one take out time to do an overall schedule of how much is spent on food" is wrong. It would have been better said " after one takes out time to calculate how much is spent on food".

Six. Also, in the third paragraph, the statement "who opt" is wrong and should be replaced with "who opt for".

Regardless, I think you should request for a remark. You would most likely be upgraded to a 7 as your use of words were succinct and above highlighted mistakes are not fundamental.
 
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Vive

Star Member
Oct 1, 2018
128
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Hi All,

As i worried, my score went up from 6 to 6.5..
Total waste of all the wait.

Have booked my exam again on 6th March.. My 6th attempt!
 
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