Try to improve upon the points i have mentioned in ur corrected essay..
Task response and vocab may be the reasons behind your lower bands.
Also share ur writing in group or on my page frequently then u ll improve a lot
IELTS - Writing - For Band 7 or Above.
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Task response and vocab may be the reasons behind your lower bands.
Also share ur writing in group or on my page frequently then u ll improve a lot
Thank You and sure I will share my writing on the group or this forum, So I can identify my mistakes and try to improve those.
Hi,
It will be helpful if anyone can check this and suggest mistakes.
Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a negative impact on
both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?
It is considered by some that social media platforms, such as Facebook, WhatsApp and Twitter, have
detrimental implications on people. In my opinion, I completely agree with aforementioned statement
as individuals as well as community have disastrous consequences by using such platforms.
A good reason to not support social networking applications is that these websites are a great threat
to a person's privacy. This is because, nowadays, numerous adolescents post their locations on these
websites just to inform their friends and relatives that they are having good time. As a result, people,
who want to hurt them, can easily track their activities and prepare the plan to hurt their feelings and
sentiments. To illustrate, a recent article from Indian University has described that 93 per cent of
kidnappers utilize Facebook profiles to locate specific person, who they want to abduct. In sort,
increasing trend of social media has a privacy concern to individual user.
Another important point to consider is that society has lost the value of conservative communication
since social media sites have become popular. This is due to almost every person prefer to have a
conversation through these platforms as it is effective and efficient way of the communication.
Consequently, community is losing their emphasis from the face-to-face conversation because websites,
such as Facebook, offer video and audio call functionalities. That is why, people are becoming less social
and avoiding the traditional way of the communication. Overall, social networking applications have had
a significant effects on the social relationship of people.
In conclusion, I believe that such websites have negative influence on community as well as individual
person, because these platforms pose a noticeable threat to a one's privacy and have encouraged
people to almost forget conventional way of communication.
Thank You
It will be helpful if anyone can check this and suggest mistakes.
Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a negative impact on
both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?
It is considered by some that social media platforms, such as Facebook, WhatsApp and Twitter, have
detrimental implications on people. In my opinion, I completely agree with aforementioned statement
as individuals as well as community have disastrous consequences by using such platforms.
A good reason to not support social networking applications is that these websites are a great threat
to a person's privacy. This is because, nowadays, numerous adolescents post their locations on these
websites just to inform their friends and relatives that they are having good time. As a result, people,
who want to hurt them, can easily track their activities and prepare the plan to hurt their feelings and
sentiments. To illustrate, a recent article from Indian University has described that 93 per cent of
kidnappers utilize Facebook profiles to locate specific person, who they want to abduct. In sort,
increasing trend of social media has a privacy concern to individual user.
Another important point to consider is that society has lost the value of conservative communication
since social media sites have become popular. This is due to almost every person prefer to have a
conversation through these platforms as it is effective and efficient way of the communication.
Consequently, community is losing their emphasis from the face-to-face conversation because websites,
such as Facebook, offer video and audio call functionalities. That is why, people are becoming less social
and avoiding the traditional way of the communication. Overall, social networking applications have had
a significant effects on the social relationship of people.
In conclusion, I believe that such websites have negative influence on community as well as individual
person, because these platforms pose a noticeable threat to a one's privacy and have encouraged
people to almost forget conventional way of communication.
Thank You
Thank you for your help.
Can you please suggest me that what should I improve to achieve 7.5 band?
Appreciated.
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I previously have shared similar information for IELTS too. In my opinion trying these (free) resources for your IELTS will make a huge difference.
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If anyone can help, please evaluate this essay.
Thank You.
Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe that actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both side and give opinion.
Although it is sometimes thought that nothing can be done to solve a detrimental impact of human activities on wildlife, other people think that precautions can be taken to preserve wild animals and plants. In my opinion, I consider that combined affords of government and individuals can minimize a negative effect on wild species.
On the one hand, it is often believed that consequences of human's interference on animals and plants cannot be resolved. Many wild creatures and vegetation have been disappeared due to human's mischievous activities. For example, African authority had released the statement in 2015 that numerous species have become extinct in African forests because of the deforestation, as they had lost their habitats. Thus, any actions after destruction cannot bring those animals back and that is why, some people believe that downsides of human activities cannot be changed.
On the other hand, small portion of population believe that prevention should be taken to not harm wildlife and I agree. To begin with, collaboration of the world's government on such issue may encourage people to not hurt animals and their habitats, since authority has significant power to influence their citizens. To illustrate, almost every Asian country has outlawed deforestation rule and after that ration of deforestation has gradually been decreased on those regions. In addition, individuals also need to understand the value of animals' life and importance of their habitats. Therefore, if one can take any steps to preserve wildlife, change will simultaneously appear in the community.
In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I believe that wildlife can be saved in the future if government and society can work together.
Thank You.
Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe that actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both side and give opinion.
Although it is sometimes thought that nothing can be done to solve a detrimental impact of human activities on wildlife, other people think that precautions can be taken to preserve wild animals and plants. In my opinion, I consider that combined affords of government and individuals can minimize a negative effect on wild species.
On the one hand, it is often believed that consequences of human's interference on animals and plants cannot be resolved. Many wild creatures and vegetation have been disappeared due to human's mischievous activities. For example, African authority had released the statement in 2015 that numerous species have become extinct in African forests because of the deforestation, as they had lost their habitats. Thus, any actions after destruction cannot bring those animals back and that is why, some people believe that downsides of human activities cannot be changed.
On the other hand, small portion of population believe that prevention should be taken to not harm wildlife and I agree. To begin with, collaboration of the world's government on such issue may encourage people to not hurt animals and their habitats, since authority has significant power to influence their citizens. To illustrate, almost every Asian country has outlawed deforestation rule and after that ration of deforestation has gradually been decreased on those regions. In addition, individuals also need to understand the value of animals' life and importance of their habitats. Therefore, if one can take any steps to preserve wildlife, change will simultaneously appear in the community.
In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I believe that wildlife can be saved in the future if government and society can work together.
Yess...there is a proper structure..
Intro bp1 bp2 and conclusion...
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Hey I have the same problem as you. L-8.5 , R-7.5, S-7.0 , W-6.5 . I am always stuck at 6.5 with writing. I already sat the exam 5 times. I get the same score with my writing over and over even though I already had some coaching. It sucks