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Topic: Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult.Does modern technology reduce or increase stress?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Over the last few decades, technology has advanced in the field of education, communication and various other fields. A number of devices have been introduced in our lives with the intention of reducing the manual effort. However, some people think that introduction of these devices has led to more difficulties. I strongly disagree with this opinion and I believe that these devices will help us immensely to reduce stress in our lives.
Some people have this opinion that if they will use labour saving devices then it would lead to more obstructions rather than making their work easy. This may be because they are new to such devices and are not aware of how to use them appropriately. They have the mind set of doing their chores manually, as they are used to it from a long time and are comfortable with it. When suddenly new devices are introduced to do the same work, they are reluctant to adapt and even if they do adapt, they are not able to use them properly because of lack of interest.
I believe if we learn to use these labour saving devices, then it can make our life easier. Use of such devices will involve less manual effort, and moreover the work would be finished in a short time with superior quality. Ultimately, we would feel more relaxed and stress free. We can use the saved time in other activities. For instance, washing machine can be used to wash dirty clothes with less time and effort. While washing machine is washing clothes, other activities which need more attention can be considered.
In conclusion, technology has invented devices to help us reduce manual effort and make our lives easier. We can leverage the benefits of labour saving devices only if we learn to use them appropriately.
