Help me seniors-- JES_ON please give me your view.

[backendcode]

Hello guys,
I am June applicants and according to trend, we going to start getting medical next month so hopefully CIC already started or going to start eligibility for June applicants. Could you please review my job letter because I wasn't aware of role of job letter in CEC class.

The letter I sent with my application package was:


June 24, 2014

To Whom It May Concern:
This letter is to confirm that xxx is employed with xxx Inc. on a full-time basis since July 7 of 2012 to till date.

xxx holds the permanent position of CAD/CAM programmer (NOC 2233). His duties include:

1. Design applications using CAD/CAM (computer-assisted drafting, computer-assisted manufacturing) for control of Computer numeric control (CNC) machines.
· 2. Develop and prepare drawings, plans, diagrams or layouts from sketches.
· 3. Collect data and assist in the development of specifications and reports.
· 4. Maintain and develop manufacturing and processing procedures.
· 5. Complete documentation and estimate packages.
· 6. Communicate with project manager and team leader in order to meet designated goals.

xxx earns a base rate of $xx.00 per hour, which based on his consistent schedule of 40 hours per week equates to an annual salary of $xx,xxx. Should the need arise; he is eligible to receive overtime.

Should you require any additional information, please feel free to contact me at (905)xxx-xxxx or by email at xx @ xxx.ca.

Sincerely,

xxx
Manager, xxx Inc.


But now I am planning to update letter.

My UPDATED LETTER WITH DETAILED ROLES AND DUTIES.



Dec 2, 2014

To Whom It May Concern:
This letter is to confirm that xxx is employed with xxx Inc. on a full-time basis since July 7 of 2012 to till date.

xxx holds the permanent position of CAD/CAM programmer (NOC 2233). His duties include:

• Design applications using CAD/CAM (computer-assisted drafting, computer-assisted manufacturing) for control of Computer numeric control (CNC) machines and other manufacturing operation to facilitate sheet metal cutting.
• Develop and conduct production by set-up machines, tool and die equipment's and inspection of other process and maintenance on equipment and machinery.
• Develop and prepare (Design) drawings, plans, diagrams and plant layouts from sketches.
• Collect valuable data and information such as dimension's, layout design from customer's drawing and assist in the development of specifications and reports.
• Maintain the existing manufacturing and processing procedure and also assist in development of new procedure.
• Maintain sheet metal inventory and complete their documentation and estimate packages.
• Download the designed applications in CNC machine and Communicate with machine operator in order to conduct work measurement.
• Communicate with project manager and team leader in order to meet designated goals.

xxx earns a base rate of $xx.00 per hour, which based on his consistent schedule of 40 hours per week equates to an annual salary of $xx,xxx. Should the need arise; he is eligible to receive overtime.

Should you require any additional information, please feel free to contact me at (905)xxx-xxxx or by email at xx @ xxx.ca.

Sincerely,

xxx
Manager, xxx Inc.


Please review my job letter and advice me should i send updated letter or my old letter is enough to support my work experience.

Thanks,
Backendcode

 

[jes_ON]

Personally, I see nothing wrong with the first letter, and no significant advantage to the second letter.

If you decide to move forward with sending the second letter, please have a native speaker edit the letter, esp. the job duties, as there are a couple that I didn't understand. Or, when you ask your boss to sign it, perhaps he/she can clarify things. As it stands, I think you are better off not submitting it.

If you send the 2nd letter, I would suggest adding a sentence at the top about the company you work for, what they do (manufacture) and for whom...

 

[backendcode]

Thanks for your reply, Could you please see if my job duties enough and meet with NOC code 2233 on HRSDC site.

Thanks a lot

 

[Gurindar]

Thanks for your reply, Could you please see if my job duties enough and meet with NOC code 2233 on HRSDC site.

Thanks a lot

Ki gal hai ? ;D badi research layi hoyi aaa??

Man my advice is don't over investigate , Review once and then send it as Jes_ON suggested .

best of luck

 

[jes_ON]

Thanks for your reply, Could you please see if my job duties enough and meet with NOC code 2233 on HRSDC site.

Already did. "Personally, I see nothing wrong with the first letter, and no significant advantage to the second letter."

 

[backendcode]

@guri , hhahahahah nhi veer bus pehle research nhi kiti c application laun to te mai keha hun kar layiye. mai ehi sochia hai k ajje update na kariye letter and gonna order gcms notes next month and je ohna ne keha k duties nhi match kardia then letter update kar deni hai. ki pata ehhi chal pave letter eve ne update karke koi panga pe jave lol.

thansk anyways

@jes_on

Thanks mate, appreciate your help

 

[Preetbindra]

Hello
Bro please me, I am also working with same title in sheet metal company. Tuadi second wali job letter approve ho gyi c ? Please reply asap me kal leni a letter manager kolo :